She can’t hear what I hear,
but a haunting bolt of lightning
of a glance bears terribly gentle
beauty, and I want to be in her
pockets, a warmth chilling her body,
walk with her in a rhythm from
the pink of clouds which reach down
and wrap me in a seemingly-permanent
state of safety, and my turn, my turn,
it made me connected, made me want
to run away forever and listen
to bedtime stories, true ones.
.
stillfugue 
#1 by Imke Rust on August 9, 2012 - 4:37 am
Lovely!
#2 by Carl on August 9, 2012 - 9:14 pm
Thank you! I like that comment!
#3 by joanna on August 9, 2012 - 8:59 am
i love the longing in this one, Carl. the last lines really seal it.
#4 by Carl on August 9, 2012 - 9:17 pm
Thank you, Joanna! Your words mean a great deal to me.
#5 by Millie Ho on August 9, 2012 - 10:12 am
Frequently I asked my mother if the bedtime stories were true. Frequently, she would say yes.
I enjoyed reading this, Carl.
#6 by Carl on August 9, 2012 - 9:18 pm
Your mother had it right! Thank you for your comment.
#7 by Millie Ho on August 9, 2012 - 9:31 pm
You’re welcome, Carl.
#8 by stillight on August 9, 2012 - 8:10 pm
i loved this, Carl, and especially the thought of wanting to be in someone’s pockets. The whole piece, it’s very endearing.
#9 by Carl on August 9, 2012 - 9:21 pm
Thank you, Jennifer! Your words are inspiring to me. I appreciate your visit and your comment.
#10 by Hawkruh on August 9, 2012 - 11:24 pm
“a haunting bolt of lightning
of a glance bears terribly gentle
beauty,” This line drew me back again and again. It reminds me of how quickly I would react to innocent looks from my husband when we were young. But with my insecurities, I would see them as jabs and not as beauty. Your words always cause me to pause and think Carl. Thank you for sharing them.
#11 by Carl on August 15, 2012 - 9:54 pm
Your comment is very kind, and I appreciate it.
#12 by Kay Camden on August 12, 2012 - 9:46 pm
This one has stuck with me since I read it in my email. I see it as a novel. It’s awesome as it is, but it would also make an awesome novel. But I think that’s my novelist’s bias.
#13 by Carl on August 15, 2012 - 10:05 pm
I understand where you’re coming from, Kay. I tried to write a novel on a lesser story, but I decided I’m a few quarts low on talent. Thanks for your comment.
#14 by Evelyn on August 16, 2012 - 11:23 am
“but a haunting bolt of lightning
of a glance bears terribly gentle
beauty”
incredible sentence. wish i wrote it.
and the last sentence leaves me with a heavy heart, for sure.
#15 by Carl on August 20, 2012 - 9:58 pm
I’m lucky when you pick out lines. I get to learn.