My Turn, My Turn Was Electric, for a Moment

She can’t hear what I hear,
but a haunting bolt of lightning
of a glance bears terribly gentle
beauty, and I want to be in her
pockets, a warmth chilling her body,
walk with her in a rhythm from
the pink of clouds which reach down
and wrap me in a seemingly-permanent

state of safety, and my turn, my turn,
it made me connected, made me want
to run away forever and listen
to bedtime stories, true ones.


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  1. #1 by Imke Rust on August 9, 2012 - 4:37 am


    • #2 by Carl on August 9, 2012 - 9:14 pm

      Thank you! I like that comment!

  2. #3 by joanna on August 9, 2012 - 8:59 am

    i love the longing in this one, Carl. the last lines really seal it.

    • #4 by Carl on August 9, 2012 - 9:17 pm

      Thank you, Joanna! Your words mean a great deal to me.

  3. #5 by Millie Ho on August 9, 2012 - 10:12 am

    Frequently I asked my mother if the bedtime stories were true. Frequently, she would say yes.

    I enjoyed reading this, Carl.

    • #6 by Carl on August 9, 2012 - 9:18 pm

      Your mother had it right! Thank you for your comment.

  4. #8 by stillight on August 9, 2012 - 8:10 pm

    i loved this, Carl, and especially the thought of wanting to be in someone’s pockets. The whole piece, it’s very endearing.

    • #9 by Carl on August 9, 2012 - 9:21 pm

      Thank you, Jennifer! Your words are inspiring to me. I appreciate your visit and your comment.

  5. #10 by Hawkruh on August 9, 2012 - 11:24 pm

    “a haunting bolt of lightning
    of a glance bears terribly gentle
    beauty,” This line drew me back again and again. It reminds me of how quickly I would react to innocent looks from my husband when we were young. But with my insecurities, I would see them as jabs and not as beauty. Your words always cause me to pause and think Carl. Thank you for sharing them.

    • #11 by Carl on August 15, 2012 - 9:54 pm

      Your comment is very kind, and I appreciate it.

  6. #12 by Kay Camden on August 12, 2012 - 9:46 pm

    This one has stuck with me since I read it in my email. I see it as a novel. It’s awesome as it is, but it would also make an awesome novel. But I think that’s my novelist’s bias.

    • #13 by Carl on August 15, 2012 - 10:05 pm

      I understand where you’re coming from, Kay. I tried to write a novel on a lesser story, but I decided I’m a few quarts low on talent. Thanks for your comment.

  7. #14 by Evelyn on August 16, 2012 - 11:23 am

    “but a haunting bolt of lightning
    of a glance bears terribly gentle
    incredible sentence. wish i wrote it.
    and the last sentence leaves me with a heavy heart, for sure.

    • #15 by Carl on August 20, 2012 - 9:58 pm

      I’m lucky when you pick out lines. I get to learn.

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