City People Left Me Here

They block one lane,
but there’s no traffic.
No pedestrians today.
We’re all under blankets,
though weather is quite mild.
The hiss is from man’s machine,
not a good addition to Beethoven’s 7th,
but I eventually block it out
as I do the rest of the happenings,
but the smoke from the machine scares me.

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  1. #1 by Kay Camden on November 8, 2011 - 8:30 am

    Sometimes you freak me out a little. Replace “Beethoven’s 7th” with “Metaphysics Of The Hangman” and this was my morning. I went around the guy in the nasty car. Did you? Or was the smoke from your own car? I hope not.

    • #2 by Carl on November 8, 2011 - 10:45 pm

      I like the scene you attached to this. It’s different than what I was describing, but I like how it worked with you.

      • #3 by Kay Camden on November 9, 2011 - 8:13 am

        Ha.. well once again I’m taking it all too literally while your metaphors are flying right over my head and I’m just sitting there like, “Purrrrrdy!”

        • #4 by Carl on November 9, 2011 - 10:05 pm

          No, no! I am thrilled that you read it and double-thrilled for your comment because it helps me learn. It’s okay for me to be more concrete at times, but when I am concrete, I want to be really good at it.

          If you read this poem and then commented on it, you have understood the poem perfectly. That’s coming from a writer, not a poetry critic.

  2. #5 by Hudson Howl on November 10, 2011 - 9:23 pm

    There are days (almost everyday to be truthful) where subscribing to an logical explanations to the real world is impossible. Where nothing makes sense. No matter how hard I try. Letting the mind run wherever it wants seems more real and more logical. I guess Beethoven’s 7th is more concrete an worthy of appreciating than the absurdities of the world at large. Regardless, your poem made me pause.

    • #6 by Carl on November 10, 2011 - 9:48 pm

      Thank you for your comment. I appreciate your reflections and am lucky that you stopped by.

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