Form for Red Flags

Warnings, red,
I never gave well.
Sinking mind.
Purple dead.
Running fast back to orange fields,
crying in mad sins.

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  1. #1 by liv2write2day on April 17, 2011 - 5:34 pm

    Effective how you used color in this one, Carl.

    • #2 by Carl on April 17, 2011 - 10:11 pm

      Thank you, Victoria. I appreciate your reading and commenting.

  2. #3 by siubhan on April 18, 2011 - 9:18 pm

    I like the color in this, too. This was one of the One Stop forms, no? I really like how the short line length in the middle gives a harshness to those lines especially, pulls them out and into focus. Bravo.

    • #4 by Carl on April 18, 2011 - 10:19 pm

      Yes, this is Shadorma – 3-5-3-3-7-5. I enjoyed it. I like how it enforces this sense of economy with the words. I think I prefer Tanka though. Thank you for your comment – It is encouraging.

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