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Man in Winter Street V5

Searing breezes on frozen
black ocean
beleaguered by barren snow.

A fierce blizzard snatched Sam,
abandoning his dead body
in a snow bank, with him
coveting his commute
home.

Beautified black jacket flies,
securing fit is not easy,
escaping a wicked, dead, terrifying street,
knowing nothing good is to come,
desperately wishing for poise,
for compassion
that steams the room,
clearing the icicles.

 

I thought it might be good to shoot at One Shot Wednesday! Check out the entries – A bunch of good artists over there!

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  1. #1 by brian on February 8, 2011 - 9:30 pm

    an interesting blend of images…the dead body, jacket…i like the hope for compassion…

    • #2 by Carl on February 8, 2011 - 10:22 pm

      Thank you for stopping in and commenting, Brian! I appreciate it.

  2. #3 by Chris G. on February 8, 2011 - 9:58 pm

    This is one that I think plays on the ambiguity and oftentimes harshness of modern life. It also reminds of an actual incident just a few years ago, near where I live, where a homeless man was found frozen…and as far as they could determine, had been as such for months. People had seen him, had gone on around him and not reported it…horrible. But I digress. A dizzying, bleak assortment of imagery…there is the longing for compassion in the end, but the question remains of whether or not it exists. Fine creation.

    • #4 by Carl on February 8, 2011 - 10:25 pm

      Thank you, Chris. I really appreciate your thoughts. You have identified much of the feeling behind this one

  3. #5 by Claudia on February 9, 2011 - 12:27 pm

    i like that you describe the wish for compassion like sth. that steams the room, clears the icicles after death and sadness came with the snow

    • #6 by Carl on February 9, 2011 - 10:03 pm

      Thank you, Claudia, I appreciate your comment.

  4. #7 by Eric on February 9, 2011 - 1:52 pm

    You really hit the mark, Carl, Nice One Shot.

    • #8 by Carl on February 9, 2011 - 10:03 pm

      Thanks so much, Eric!

  5. #9 by Evelyn on February 9, 2011 - 8:24 pm

    “knowing nothing good is to come,
    desperately wishing for poise,
    for compassion
    that steams the room,
    clearing the icicles.”
    huge chunk of goodness.
    brillant lines

    • #10 by Carl on February 9, 2011 - 10:07 pm

      Oh, thank you so much. All of your kind words keep me going!

  6. #11 by Shashi on February 11, 2011 - 4:23 am

    Beautiful vivid and stark picturisation of the street.. and the room in contrast.. I liked it very much. thanks for sharing.

    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya
    http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2011/02/whispers-another-kind-of-valentines-day.html

    • #12 by Carl on February 11, 2011 - 6:25 am

      Thank you for reading and commenting, Shashi. I loved your poems! Blogger would not let me comment, but they were fabulous!

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